Comments on: Writers Block.long time since my last poem.critique please? http://languageisavirus.com/questions/writers-blocklong-time-since-my-last-poemcritique-please creative writing questions and answers Sun, 21 Mar 2010 05:27:56 +0000 http://wordpress.org/?v=2.9.2 hourly 1 By: Jessica P http://languageisavirus.com/questions/writers-blocklong-time-since-my-last-poemcritique-please/comment-page-1#comment-4654 Jessica P Fri, 12 Dec 2008 19:36:59 +0000 http://languageisavirus.com/questions/writers-blocklong-time-since-my-last-poemcritique-please#comment-4654 Apart from the ending, I like this. The second to last paragraph is very good. It has a good idea and you deliver it well, but I'd think about changing the last one. I think the last line isn't very original, as many poems end like this, so I'd try for something bolder. Whenever I get writer's block, I take some paper and a pen with me everywhere I go and any chance I get, I write down anything, as random as they are sometimes, that comes to mind. It's a good way to capture emotions and I find that it takes the stress out of writer's block. Apart from the ending, I like this.
The second to last paragraph is very good. It has a good idea and you deliver it well, but I’d think about changing the last one. I think the last line isn’t very original, as many poems end like this, so I’d try for something bolder.

Whenever I get writer’s block, I take some paper and a pen with me everywhere I go and any chance I get, I write down anything, as random as they are sometimes, that comes to mind. It’s a good way to capture emotions and I find that it takes the stress out of writer’s block.

]]> By: laura K http://languageisavirus.com/questions/writers-blocklong-time-since-my-last-poemcritique-please/comment-page-1#comment-4653 laura K Thu, 11 Dec 2008 16:52:22 +0000 http://languageisavirus.com/questions/writers-blocklong-time-since-my-last-poemcritique-please#comment-4653 It doesnt sound like you have writers block to me this is great. Im really excited to be reading great poetry maybe I will try writing some too! It doesnt sound like you have writers block to me this is great. Im really excited to be reading great poetry maybe I will try writing some too!

]]> By: ksukhin http://languageisavirus.com/questions/writers-blocklong-time-since-my-last-poemcritique-please/comment-page-1#comment-4652 ksukhin Thu, 11 Dec 2008 08:06:03 +0000 http://languageisavirus.com/questions/writers-blocklong-time-since-my-last-poemcritique-please#comment-4652 so far so good, this is just my personal preference but try to use more multi-sylable rhymes. ie: rest away, stressed to say ; emulate, tell them wait, etc. also talk about your future, like what you expect to achieve or what you will do with your life. so far so good, this is just my personal preference but try to use more multi-sylable rhymes.
ie: rest away, stressed to say ; emulate, tell them wait, etc.

also talk about your future, like what you expect to achieve or what you will do with your life.

]]> By: shreder (is on yahoos hot list) http://languageisavirus.com/questions/writers-blocklong-time-since-my-last-poemcritique-please/comment-page-1#comment-4651 shreder (is on yahoos hot list) Tue, 09 Dec 2008 04:34:36 +0000 http://languageisavirus.com/questions/writers-blocklong-time-since-my-last-poemcritique-please#comment-4651 well you dont indcate on a personal note that this is more creative rather than serious personal emotional distress so it scares me a little. like I posted some lyrics that yahoo took off like I knew they would because I am on the hit list. but it was kind of gloomy but it was in retrospect of something and I told people that so they wouldnt call 911 for me to take in to st lukes behavioral health care system. if u take the "i drink i somke" out of there its really pretty dang GOOD well you dont indcate on a personal note that this is more creative rather than serious personal emotional distress so it scares me a little. like I posted some lyrics that yahoo took off like I knew they would because I am on the hit list. but it was kind of gloomy but it was in retrospect of something and I told people that so they wouldnt call 911 for me to take in to st lukes behavioral health care system.

if u take the “i drink i somke” out of there its really pretty dang GOOD

]]> By: TD Euwaite™ http://languageisavirus.com/questions/writers-blocklong-time-since-my-last-poemcritique-please/comment-page-1#comment-4650 TD Euwaite™ Fri, 05 Dec 2008 17:45:44 +0000 http://languageisavirus.com/questions/writers-blocklong-time-since-my-last-poemcritique-please#comment-4650 Your little flying machine flutters, floats...and then flops. I wanted a more powerful ending. You are a good writer. Your rhythm here is very tight. Your little flying machine flutters, floats…and then flops. I wanted a more powerful ending. You are a good writer. Your rhythm here is very tight.

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