I’m writing a short fiction story for class. How does this look so far?
The Mysterious Woman
She was a woman of mid age, about 55 or so, who just had a mysterious phone call at her house. She didn’t know exactly who this person was, or why they were calling her house at such wee hours of the morning on a Saturday, but she was determined to find out. The woman was looking for her husband, who was out of town on a business trip.
The woman said her name was Maria Santalos. A Spanish person perhaps, calling from a private number, as seen from the out of range signal coming from the caller ID. Judging from her soft spoken voice, one can assume that she was a lot younger than herself, maybe even a person in their mid twenties.
The wife frantically started having a ton of questions in her mind. She wasn’t sure what her husband was doing with such a young woman. Was he cheating on her? Was he surprising her with something? Was this a child of his, from an ex girlfriend, that she did not know about? All these questions started rushing through her mind. She was eager to find out whoever this person was that her husband was “so-called” hiding from her.
She hurriedly ran towards the nearest computer at her house and typed in Maria Santalos under Google search. Nothing came up about this person. She was really confused and thus got scared and worried about what her husband was doing with this young woman. She had to find out more details.
She then raced downstairs and grabbed her car keys. She hustled out in her white Mercedes Convertible and drove to the nearest library in town. She asked the receptionist if there were any books or references on a woman, named Maria Santalos. The receptionist couldn’t find any sources mentioning that woman’s name. She continued to go frantic. She did not know what to do and the thoughts - particularly the unanswered questions - kept racing through her mind.
The woman stormed out of the library with no success. She went back into her white Mercedes Convertible and called her best friend via cell phone. The best friend could tell she was having an off day and invited her over for some tea.
Twenty minutes later, she arrived at her best friend’s house. Her husband answered the door and led her inside. The best friend was in the kitchen brewing the hot water. The best friend told her to sit down and make herself comfortable in the living room, and she’ll be there in a minute. Fifteen minutes passed and the best friend came in.
“Is everything okay, Lynette?” asked the best friend.
“Not at all Eliana, but we could discuss this over tea.”
The best friend understood and nodded. She brought out a mixture of teas and two cups of hot water for both of them. They each reached and grabbed for the Green Tea. They had similar tastes in everything and that was one of the many reasons why they were best friends.
Lynette started speaking. She explained to Eliana of the mysterious phone call she had from a young woman named Maria Santalos and how there were no records of her in the library or over the internet. Eliana was shocked and surprised by all this and never suspected Lynette’s husband to go against her best friend like that. They were high school sweethearts and were inseparable ever since senior year. She suggested for Lynette to hire a detective.
- Jenna
