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i’d also like the higher end of the model. im still trying to keep it affordable so what do you think some options are? i wouldn’t mind a car with a stock turbo.
- c.dub41

A description of my creativity today.(or lack thereof)

Not even one dis-interested breeze
Gives pause to play with brittle leaves
Which lay upon the cracked cement
Already scorched from the scrutiny
Of the sun as it defies the meager shade
To peek from where it hides in shame
The weeds that did not bow
To the mower as it growled
Now stand in silent salute
As the distant sound of lazy cars
Draw near with sudden roar and rape
The silence of any remnants of dignity
- SIN

I’ve been writing and writing the last few days, and now, the inevitable nightmare of all writers has returned… writer’s block.

I’m stuck on the sentence below. It sounds so amateur and I just can’t do anything to fix it. The sentence is driving me crazy, and I haven’t been able to write anything else. If I could just fix this sentence, I think I’ll be able to continue with the rest of my story.

Could anyone expand this sentence, or modify bits that don’t sound right? (In the story, the car crashes, with the main character - a young girl - and her father inside. The father dies, but the girl survives. This sentence is part of a flashback.)

*The cars span out of control and crashed, the chorus of scathing metal and screams was worse than the pain itself.*
I’m writing in past tense - “The car SPAN…”

I’m also writing in first person, from the perspective of the teenage girl.

I’d like the sentence to be expanded, if anyone can help.
Oops, you’re totally right, I’ve mixed up my tenses. I’ll fix it up. It’s in past tense.
Oh goodness. Sorry, I don’t know what’s wrong with my writing today. There’s only one car.
Thanks for all the advice!! I made so many silly mistakes. Trust me, my writing is usually not this horrific.
- Samantha

I know i am opening a can of worms by asking this but please any ideas you have would really help. If possible be slightly more specific with your ideas, something more than just saying write a poem about cars. If however all you can think of is just cars or some sort of one word answer put it on who knows maybee it will help
- guitardood50