I need help? Lacking inspiration? Read this poem? Please tell me that I don’t have writers block?
I feel as if it’s off…I just can’t get the words out right…What can I do to make it better?
Back off best friend
No longer a lover
Those days, forget them
Everything, everyday,
Every hug, every kiss
Sweet blissfulness, done and over
Watch you walk away
Thought I would cry
Thought that I would be empty
Thought that I’d hold myself
Cry into my own arms
But that need is not here
That need does not exist
- Harlow Ember
Tags: Best Friend, Inspiration, Kiss, Poem, Writer's Block
June 25th, 2009 at 5:38 pm
It can be helpful to think of poetry as song lyrics. That forces you to recognize the rhythm behind the words. Poetry should speak to the most creative part of your reader’s mind.
Sage E.
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June 26th, 2009 at 2:58 am
It’s good so far, try doing some imagery and repetition
June 27th, 2009 at 4:18 am
i think that was a good peom because you want with your natural self in it. it seems like you was talking in the peom.
June 29th, 2009 at 1:41 am
I liked certain parts… some parts were ok, while some were very bad. the last 2 stanzas fell into the really bad