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Question #1:

Writers: do you ever stop fluctuating between complete egotism and complete self-hatred about your work?

I am an undergraduate majoring in poetry composition, and as a result, producing work and receiving feedback constantly. Some days, I feel equal to Shakespeare. Others, I feel like I'm not good enough to write at all. These emotions rarely even have any environmental triggers. It's just that some days, the positive reviews I receive seem more important than the negative. Other days, vice versa. Very much so. It's a lousy, bipolar feeling. Does it ever level out to something more reasonable?

Question #2:

Can I please get feedback on my poem?

I am just new to writing poetry and I want to know if this is any good. I would appreciate honest opinions as well, but if you don't like it please say why :)
Thanks in advance.

Three times
Two times
One time
Sun time
Fun time
Gun time
Clap, Clap,
Clap!
War time.
Rivers of sludge curve down from factories
We see them but we are blind
Deaf to the screams of birds as they die in a poison laced sky.
Anthrax rains drop down upon us
But we do not fair what we have created.
We embrace the four horseman;
War,
Famine,
Death,
Pestilence.
And do you know why?
Because the human race has never been so
Wealthy.


I don't know if it's my best work but I think it's alright. My other ones are all alot longer which is why I didn't post them
whoops I used the wrong fear/fair there

Question #3:

Will You Give Me Feedback?

I write poetry, mostly love poetry and other things about my life and i'm really shy about letting people read it. But i think i'm going to go ahead and break out of my shell. If you want to read some of my poetry you can email me @ tralina_lina@yahoo.com and i will send you the ones i have. I would appreciate it if you gave me feedback positive or negative i just need to know if i'm good thanks :)
I really cant chose a best answer for this but thanks for your support. I posted one of my poems and somebody left a not so nice comment on it :-/

Question #4:

What do you think of my poem? (it's short, please answer)?

. i usually just write some cheesy rhyming poem...but now i'm trying to improve in this type of poetry... i apologize if it's horribly written.. i'm only 14, and not experienced at all in writting... any tips on how to improve the poem, as well as title suggestions would be very much appreciated:)

I feel the frigid steel
scamper freely down my arm
the transgression of veins
leave streams of scarlet
all uniting together
in a puddle
on the black-tiled floor

The teardrop
catches on my closed lash
then falls down
the flushed plane of my cheek
leaving a black trail of mascara
contrasting darkly
with my ashen skin

The silence pierces my ears
my eyes continue their water bleeding
I can taste my salty tearsdrops
smearing my blood all over the walls
I’m the quietest form of rebel

**sighs** .. i've posted this many times.. but have only gotten a few suggestions and feedback... i apologize if i'm getting annoying with the posts... i just really want lots of constructive critisism...

Question #5:

Some more feedback on my Poetry?

As the weeks passed by and the story did spread.
Also did the words the teacher had read.

"Maybe a lil Maybe alot
But tomorrow forget you I will surely not.
Maybe its love Maybe its lust
But you remain in my heart til it turns to dust."

Bye and Bye the years went on.
Him never forgetting she was the one.
So on continued his life.
Filled mostly with joy and sometimes strife.
Until that day he got "it" in the mail.
The letter, the reason his emotions set sail.
A simple, not forgotten, elegant lil poem,
In a simple white envelope addressed to his home.

"Maybe a lil Maybe alot
But tomorrow forget you I will surely not.
Maybe its love Maybe its lust
But you remain in my heart til it turns to dust."

She had never forgotten the words he wrote.
Nor her schoolmates laughter, and jokes.
But yet she anwsered his poem with her own.
Honesty and compassion he read in her tone.

"Maybe alot Maybe not so much
But for years my heart your words have touched.
Maybe its lust Maybe its love
Over hardships those words carried me beyond and above."

And all this by simply putting your feelings and words together.
Look outside your door I sent myself with this letter.

Question #6:

What do you think of my poem? (please answer)?

.. i usually just write some cheesy rhyming poem...but now i'm trying to improve in this type of poetry... i apologize if it's horribly written.. i'm only 14, and not experienced at all in writting... any tips on how to improve the poem, as well as title suggestions would be very much appreciated:)

I feel the frigid steel
scamper freely down my arm
the transgression of veins
leave streams of scarlet
all uniting together
in a puddle
on the black-tiled floor

The teardrop
catches on my closed lash
then falls down
the flushed plane of my cheek
leaving a black trail of mascara
contrasting darkly
with my ashen skin

The silence pierces through my ears
I taste my salty teardrops
smearing my blood all over the walls
I’m the quietest form of rebel


**i already posted this.. like 5 hours ago.. but got no feedback**
.. *sighs* .. then i posted it again... and only got t 1 answer...so here it is again....

Question #7:

What do you think of my poem?

.. i usually just write some cheesy rhyming poem...but now i'm trying to improve in this type of poetry... i apologize if it's horribly written.. i'm only 14, and not experienced at all in writting... any tips on how to improve the poem, as well as title suggestions would be very much appreciated:)

I feel the frigid steel
scamper freely down my arm
the transgression of veins
leave streams of scarlet
all uniting together
in a puddle
on the black-tiled floor

The teardrop
catches on my closed lash
then falls down
the flushed plane of my cheek
leaving a black trail of mascara
contrasting darkly
with my ashen skin

The silence pierces through my ears
I taste my salty teardrops
smearing my blood all over the walls
I’m the quietest form of rebel


**i already posted this.. like 5 hours ago.. but got no feedback**

Question #8:

What do you think of this poem?

I posted it 2 days ago but I just want feedback because I am thinking of sharing it @ poetry night..



The hopes of the pills helping
Isn't the solution
The temporary feeling soon escapes
The guilt and burden still lays within your heart
Grief at the top of your memory
Reminiscing on your actions that destroyed another is hard to accept
The pain is balled up, flooding around inside you
Life begins to move in a fast pace
Drugs,popping pills,parties, and drinking
Still the next day, you wake up feeling miserable
Only if you could get up and walk away
But, No matter where you are and how you feel, it's still with you
What stops you is the memory of what started this
In your dreams appear the face of your mother
Sadness and disappointment filled in her eyes
And she's yelling why?
All you can say is "Sorry"

Question #9:

Can I get some feedback on my poetry?

Just like her Dad had done.

Her father was an addict,
he was never home.
He took off to go buy drugs
and left her all alone.

She never knew when he'd come back,
or even if he would.
She waited for him day and night,
just like a good girl should.

One day that little girl grew up.
She started using too.
Her life was full of one night stands,
the consequences not in view.

Soon she'll be a mother.
Then life won't be so fun.
She'll leave her kid to go buy drugs.
Just like her dad had done.

What do you guys think?
This was inspired by the people I know who's lives have been affected by drugs. It made me sad and I am very anti-drug so I wrote this little poem.

Question #10:

Pessimistic poetry (feedback please)?

Please honestly tell me what you think, no hard feelings

As you plaster on your fake like smile,
And choke back tears,
I choke back life,
Counting down the years.

Are you ready?
Its almost time for the show,
I await- My blood lust has grown.

Your scent lingers as you grace us with your presence,
My smile swells i will soon taste blood.
My tongue explores my new set of teeth,
I am thrilled to be the host of your last heart beat.

The screams, shouts, and yells of fear,
Are canceled out,
As i run my fingers through your still living hair,

Now lost in thought,
Your beauty now present in death,
You look so pretty as you beg for one last
Breath.

Your blood: warm, soothing, soft,
settles my anger.

I watch as your eyelides close,
your world turns black,
we've gone to far,
there is no turning back.

Uncontrollable now,
Instincts take control.
Blood flowing,
What have i done?

Better of dead,
I finish the deed.
Amazingly beautiful as you slowly bleed.
Your corpse body falls to the floor,
Im done,
I cant take this anymore.

Slowly, cautiously I grab the knife.
Do I look beautiful as I end my life?

Question #11:

How do you feel when people...?

compliment you
without constructive
feedback
posting their questions
over and over
plugging away
at perusers
promoting like
politicians
pompously
purveying
poetry
pretending
to purvey
adoration
posting
poems,
the same poems
over and over
and over and
over and over
and over and...
well?

LOL.

Question #12:

please critique my poetry, let me know if you think its good enough for publishing or bad enough to throw away?

What do you think of my poetry and should i try to get it published?please give honest feedback?
These are just a few of the poems which i wrote while a a lockdown rehab facility which caused me to fall back into a deep depression and i learned that writing came easy to me if i just wote how i felt and didnt have to think about my words. ill give jjust a few haikus and then some song/poems i wrote because theres way too many haikus to give them all and id like to fit in the song poems also.

Your misconceptions
These misinterpretations
Are running my life

I don’t have much time
So I write the most I can
‘Fore they take my life

They have the power
When will we finally wake?
Rise and take it back

They all seeing eye
It is beginning to rise
Has been for some time

Why can’t you shut up
Your words make my body freeze
I want to kill you

To see Valhalla
It’s all imaginary
Heroes don’t exist

All you do is buy
Until you grow so tired
Suddenly you die

Do you enjoy life?
To do so needs ignorance
I would rather die

To be nothingness
The beauty of suicide
You decide for me

To not understand
Defeats the purpose at hand
It’s not me it’s you

As you pass those gates
Do you regret your choices?
Or waste your chances?



Can you hear that song?
That’s what keeps me moving on
I brush myself off

To see all my faults
Only creates more judgment
Don’t return the gift

Seeps into your room
When you try to fall asleep
Keeping you awake

Everyone longs
For someone to truly love
Love is a white lie

They were at my side
I just pushed them right aside
Now I can’t decide

We have all lost rights
We are out of the Lord’s sight
No God-given rights

They keep patrolling
Pretending to be your friend
If you love me, leave

All I want to do
Is to get away from you
Now just get away

We are growing sick
From the contaminations
We take willingly

Explosions inside
Take away all that is here
Lives on in my dreams

Metaphors for me
Misinterpreted by me
They’re getting to me



Start feeling better
After several hundred
Many more to go

All that has passed me by
Return to an unknown world
Must restart again

Just as I have felt
I wish to spread all throughout
All the tears and joy

Just leave me alone
Lock me up in solitude
Please, just leave me be

Unwritten ending
Waiting for you to fill in
Can not be complete

Like a fairy tale
Everything from nothing
It’s all or nothing

Rather than pre-judge
Enjoy the beauty inside
Then you can decide

My inspiration
You wouldn’t understand it
You couldn’t stand it

You must find the time
Weigh out the consequences
Then you can decide

Every line’s new
A new story to be told
All in what you see

Everybody
Besides me gets what they need
Feeling left behind
......................................…
......................................
....................................

Visions in the sky
Watching life pass me on by
Such inspiration
Just want to sit here and write
It’s all so perfect
Might be my last time outside
Enjoying my time
I want to write forever
It’s so amazing
How wondrous life can be
If you give it time
Don’t let it slip through your hands
May be your last chance
Know it’s mine for a long time
Want o hold on tight
But first I need some control
May wait till Christmas
Before I can go outside
See my friends again
Do more than just hang with them
Not much time to spend
Before I must leave again
I must write again
Cherish all the time you have
Because it won’t last
Live a life with no regrets
Don’t hold yourself back
You’re the only one who can
Please understand that
It’s the nest advice I have
You only live once
Don’t imitate my mistakes






We used to have it all
Nothing stood in our way
Then you moved so far away
Everything turned to disarray
And we stand in each others way
But now I see so clearly
Just what I said back then
I guess it’s all relative
To myself
I feel like I'm perfect
Bulletproof
Nothing I do can hurt me
Not even the things I did to you
It brings tears to my eyes
I cant deny
That I loved you
Or so I thought
I’ve proven myself wrong
You used to mean so much to me
Then it all got in the way
Just a way for me to get laid
I became what I hated
You were just my escape
From the pain
I felt in me
Threw you away
Treated you like ****
You never deserved it
Just a dear in the headlights
Thought you were the problem
But so was I
I guess we both were wrong
Now is your chance to live






Looking out the window
Watching life pass you by
Wishing I was on the outside
Inside of you

Staring into my eyes
Seeing what I can find
All the buried treasures
Waiting to be uncovered

Watching the looking glass
I see a different self
One I’d rather be
He thinks the same of me

In another dimension
We all see what we want to be
We can’t see reality

Everyone wan

Question #13:

Is my poetry good or bad? should i get it published? honest opinions please?

What do you think of my poetry and should i try to get it published?please give honest feedback
These are just a few of the poems which i wrote while a a lockdown rehab facility which caused me to fall back into a deep depression and i learned that writing came easy to me if i just wote how i felt and didnt have to think about my words. ill give jjust a few haikus and then some song/poems i wrote because theres way too many haikus to give them all and id like to fit in the song poems also.

Your misconceptions
These misinterpretations
Are running my life

I don’t have much time
So I write the most I can
‘Fore they take my life

They have the power
When will we finally wake?
Rise and take it back

They all seeing eye
It is beginning to rise
Has been for some time

Why can’t you shut up
Your words make my body freeze
I want to kill you

To see Valhalla
It’s all imaginary
Heroes don’t exist

All you do is buy
Until you grow so tired
Suddenly you die

Do you enjoy life?
To do so needs ignorance
I would rather die

To be nothingness
The beauty of suicide
You decide for me

To not understand
Defeats the purpose at hand
It’s not me it’s you

As you pass those gates
Do you regret your choices?
Or waste your chances?



Can you hear that song?
That’s what keeps me moving on
I brush myself off

To see all my faults
Only creates more judgment
Don’t return the gift

Seeps into your room
When you try to fall asleep
Keeping you awake

Everyone longs
For someone to truly love
Love is a white lie

They were at my side
I just pushed them right aside
Now I can’t decide

We have all lost rights
We are out of the Lord’s sight
No God-given rights

They keep patrolling
Pretending to be your friend
If you love me, leave

All I want to do
Is to get away from you
Now just get away

We are growing sick
From the contaminations
We take willingly

Explosions inside
Take away all that is here
Lives on in my dreams

Metaphors for me
Misinterpreted by me
They’re getting to me



Start feeling better
After several hundred
Many more to go

All that has passed me by
Return to an unknown world
Must restart again

Just as I have felt
I wish to spread all throughout
All the tears and joy

Just leave me alone
Lock me up in solitude
Please, just leave me be

Unwritten ending
Waiting for you to fill in
Can not be complete

Like a fairy tale
Everything from nothing
It’s all or nothing

Rather than pre-judge
Enjoy the beauty inside
Then you can decide

My inspiration
You wouldn’t understand it
You couldn’t stand it

You must find the time
Weigh out the consequences
Then you can decide

Every line’s new
A new story to be told
All in what you see

Everybody
Besides me gets what they need
Feeling left behind
......................................…
......................................
....................................

Visions in the sky
Watching life pass me on by
Such inspiration
Just want to sit here and write
It’s all so perfect
Might be my last time outside
Enjoying my time
I want to write forever
It’s so amazing
How wondrous life can be
If you give it time
Don’t let it slip through your hands
May be your last chance
Know it’s mine for a long time
Want o hold on tight
But first I need some control
May wait till Christmas
Before I can go outside
See my friends again
Do more than just hang with them
Not much time to spend
Before I must leave again
I must write again
Cherish all the time you have
Because it won’t last
Live a life with no regrets
Don’t hold yourself back
You’re the only one who can
Please understand that
It’s the nest advice I have
You only live once
Don’t imitate my mistakes






We used to have it all
Nothing stood in our way
Then you moved so far away
Everything turned to disarray
And we stand in each others way
But now I see so clearly
Just what I said back then
I guess it’s all relative
To myself
I feel like I'm perfect
Bulletproof
Nothing I do can hurt me
Not even the things I did to you
It brings tears to my eyes
I cant deny
That I loved you
Or so I thought
I’ve proven myself wrong
You used to mean so much to me
Then it all got in the way
Just a way for me to get laid
I became what I hated
You were just my escape
From the pain
I felt in me
Threw you away
Treated you like ****
You never deserved it
Just a dear in the headlights
Thought you were the problem
But so was I
I guess we both were wrong
Now is your chance to live






Looking out the window
Watching life pass you by
Wishing I was on the outside
Inside of you

Staring into my eyes
Seeing what I can find
All the buried treasures
Waiting to be uncovered

Watching the looking glass
I see a different self
One I’d rather be
He thinks the same of me

In another dimension
We all see what we want to be
We can’t see reality

Everyone want

Question #14:

please help me out here?

What do you think of my poetry and should i try to get it published?please give honest feedback?
These are just a few of the poems which i wrote while a a lockdown rehab facility which caused me to fall back into a deep depression and i learned that writing came easy to me if i just wote how i felt and didnt have to think about my words. ill give jjust a few haikus and then some song/poems i wrote because theres way too many haikus to give them all and id like to fit in the song poems also.

Your misconceptions
These misinterpretations
Are running my life

I don’t have much time
So I write the most I can
‘Fore they take my life

They have the power
When will we finally wake?
Rise and take it back

They all seeing eye
It is beginning to rise
Has been for some time

Why can’t you shut up
Your words make my body freeze
I want to kill you

To see Valhalla
It’s all imaginary
Heroes don’t exist

All you do is buy
Until you grow so tired
Suddenly you die

Do you enjoy life?
To do so needs ignorance
I would rather die

To be nothingness
The beauty of suicide
You decide for me

To not understand
Defeats the purpose at hand
It’s not me it’s you

As you pass those gates
Do you regret your choices?
Or waste your chances?



Can you hear that song?
That’s what keeps me moving on
I brush myself off

To see all my faults
Only creates more judgment
Don’t return the gift

Seeps into your room
When you try to fall asleep
Keeping you awake

Everyone longs
For someone to truly love
Love is a white lie

They were at my side
I just pushed them right aside
Now I can’t decide

We have all lost rights
We are out of the Lord’s sight
No God-given rights

They keep patrolling
Pretending to be your friend
If you love me, leave

All I want to do
Is to get away from you
Now just get away

We are growing sick
From the contaminations
We take willingly

Explosions inside
Take away all that is here
Lives on in my dreams

Metaphors for me
Misinterpreted by me
They’re getting to me



Start feeling better
After several hundred
Many more to go

All that has passed me by
Return to an unknown world
Must restart again

Just as I have felt
I wish to spread all throughout
All the tears and joy

Just leave me alone
Lock me up in solitude
Please, just leave me be

Unwritten ending
Waiting for you to fill in
Can not be complete

Like a fairy tale
Everything from nothing
It’s all or nothing

Rather than pre-judge
Enjoy the beauty inside
Then you can decide

My inspiration
You wouldn’t understand it
You couldn’t stand it

You must find the time
Weigh out the consequences
Then you can decide

Every line’s new
A new story to be told
All in what you see

Everybody
Besides me gets what they need
Feeling left behind
......................................…
......................................
....................................

Visions in the sky
Watching life pass me on by
Such inspiration
Just want to sit here and write
It’s all so perfect
Might be my last time outside
Enjoying my time
I want to write forever
It’s so amazing
How wondrous life can be
If you give it time
Don’t let it slip through your hands
May be your last chance
Know it’s mine for a long time
Want o hold on tight
But first I need some control
May wait till Christmas
Before I can go outside
See my friends again
Do more than just hang with them
Not much time to spend
Before I must leave again
I must write again
Cherish all the time you have
Because it won’t last
Live a life with no regrets
Don’t hold yourself back
You’re the only one who can
Please understand that
It’s the nest advice I have
You only live once
Don’t imitate my mistakes






We used to have it all
Nothing stood in our way
Then you moved so far away
Everything turned to disarray
And we stand in each others way
But now I see so clearly
Just what I said back then
I guess it’s all relative
To myself
I feel like I'm perfect
Bulletproof
Nothing I do can hurt me
Not even the things I did to you
It brings tears to my eyes
I cant deny
That I loved you
Or so I thought
I’ve proven myself wrong
You used to mean so much to me
Then it all got in the way
Just a way for me to get laid
I became what I hated
You were just my escape
From the pain
I felt in me
Threw you away
Treated you like ****
You never deserved it
Just a dear in the headlights
Thought you were the problem
But so was I
I guess we both were wrong
Now is your chance to live






Looking out the window
Watching life pass you by
Wishing I was on the outside
Inside of you

Staring into my eyes
Seeing what I can find
All the buried treasures
Waiting to be uncovered

Watching the looking glass
I see a different self
One I’d rather be
He thinks the same of me

In another dimension
We all see what we want to be
We can’t see reality

Everyone wan

Question #15:

What do you think of my poetry and should i try to get it published?please give honest feedback?

These are just a few of the poems which i wrote while a a lockdown rehab facility which caused me to fall back into a deep depression and i learned that writing came easy to me if i just wote how i felt and didnt have to think about my words. ill give jjust a few haikus and then some song/poems i wrote because theres way too many haikus to give them all and id like to fit in the song poems also.

Your misconceptions
These misinterpretations
Are running my life

I don’t have much time
So I write the most I can
‘Fore they take my life

They have the power
When will we finally wake?
Rise and take it back

They all seeing eye
It is beginning to rise
Has been for some time

Why can’t you shut up
Your words make my body freeze
I want to kill you

To see Valhalla
It’s all imaginary
Heroes don’t exist

All you do is buy
Until you grow so tired
Suddenly you die

Do you enjoy life?
To do so needs ignorance
I would rather die

To be nothingness
The beauty of suicide
You decide for me

To not understand
Defeats the purpose at hand
It’s not me it’s you

As you pass those gates
Do you regret your choices?
Or waste your chances?



Can you hear that song?
That’s what keeps me moving on
I brush myself off

To see all my faults
Only creates more judgment
Don’t return the gift

Seeps into your room
When you try to fall asleep
Keeping you awake

Everyone longs
For someone to truly love
Love is a white lie

They were at my side
I just pushed them right aside
Now I can’t decide

We have all lost rights
We are out of the Lord’s sight
No God-given rights

They keep patrolling
Pretending to be your friend
If you love me, leave

All I want to do
Is to get away from you
Now just get away

We are growing sick
From the contaminations
We take willingly

Explosions inside
Take away all that is here
Lives on in my dreams

Metaphors for me
Misinterpreted by me
They’re getting to me



Start feeling better
After several hundred
Many more to go

All that has passed me by
Return to an unknown world
Must restart again

Just as I have felt
I wish to spread all throughout
All the tears and joy

Just leave me alone
Lock me up in solitude
Please, just leave me be

Unwritten ending
Waiting for you to fill in
Can not be complete

Like a fairy tale
Everything from nothing
It’s all or nothing

Rather than pre-judge
Enjoy the beauty inside
Then you can decide

My inspiration
You wouldn’t understand it
You couldn’t stand it

You must find the time
Weigh out the consequences
Then you can decide

Every line’s new
A new story to be told
All in what you see

Everybody
Besides me gets what they need
Feeling left behind
.......................................
......................................
....................................

Visions in the sky
Watching life pass me on by
Such inspiration
Just want to sit here and write
It’s all so perfect
Might be my last time outside
Enjoying my time
I want to write forever
It’s so amazing
How wondrous life can be
If you give it time
Don’t let it slip through your hands
May be your last chance
Know it’s mine for a long time
Want o hold on tight
But first I need some control
May wait till Christmas
Before I can go outside
See my friends again
Do more than just hang with them
Not much time to spend
Before I must leave again
I must write again
Cherish all the time you have
Because it won’t last
Live a life with no regrets
Don’t hold yourself back
You’re the only one who can
Please understand that
It’s the nest advice I have
You only live once
Don’t imitate my mistakes






We used to have it all
Nothing stood in our way
Then you moved so far away
Everything turned to disarray
And we stand in each others way
But now I see so clearly
Just what I said back then
I guess it’s all relative
To myself
I feel like I'm perfect
Bulletproof
Nothing I do can hurt me
Not even the things I did to you
It brings tears to my eyes
I cant deny
That I loved you
Or so I thought
I’ve proven myself wrong
You used to mean so much to me
Then it all got in the way
Just a way for me to get laid
I became what I hated
You were just my escape
From the pain
I felt in me
Threw you away
Treated you like shit
You never deserved it
Just a dear in the headlights
Thought you were the problem
But so was I
I guess we both were wrong
Now is your chance to live






Looking out the window
Watching life pass you by
Wishing I was on the outside
Inside of you

Staring into my eyes
Seeing what I can find
All the buried treasures
Waiting to be uncovered

Watching the looking glass
I see a different self
One I’d rather be
He thinks the same of me

In another dimension
We all see what we want to be
We can’t see reality

Everyone wants to be someone else
Wants to feel just like you
Thinking it’s so perfect
Until you get there

Question #16:

What do you think about my....?!? :D?

......my two short poems for an English project

1- has to be about living in a city

We all know that the city never sleeps;
Whether it’s in Tokyo or New York.
The streets are litten with lights ever so bright,
Leaving no choice but too party all night.
Dancing all night until the sun comes up.

Its morning; traffic is flooding
Traffic between cars and people
Puzzled if you’ll be there on time
Hearing loud noises down the streets
Let’s just say it’s a busy heap….

1- has to be about my name

Nora is the name I was given
Nora is the name I would give in
Often I’de be called Lora
Glad to know I wasn’t named Dora
And no, I don’t use a Menorah
Nor, was I born in Aurora
My parents say it’s unique
And it meshes with my physique
I may agree on that,
But not the fact I’ve been called a brat


do you think they are good? what should i improve on? any other comments?

:) thanks

oh and what should my other one be about? it can be about any thing...

i know it might be in a wrong category, but if i put it in poetry, nobody goes there so i wont get lot of feedback.... :P trust me.
i posted one there and i got 2 feedback then i posted the same one on p&s and got 27 :P

Question #17:

Feedback on this short poem?

I know it's pretty bad. Honestly, I think I suck at poetry :) btw i'm 14 and this is an assignment for school.


Candlelight

In a night of darkness,
One beam stands strong.
A single flame. A lonesome light. A lost flare.

On a shady tabletop,
It straightens as it burns.
The soldier’s back. The devil’s tongue. The killer’s prayer.

Amid a wispy wind,
It flickers and it snaps.
A teacher’s whip. A canine’s jaw. A judge’s glare.

Before my wondr’us gaze
It lures my pupil to a holt.
The last slice. The cliff’s edge. The beast’s lair.

Upon the tarnished candlestick
It dribble-drips right down the side.
A sudden flash. A line of smoke. Darkness.

Question #18:

2nd posting of this poem, would truly appreciate more feedback on it?

Poetry so full of thought
Each person interprets
Yet how much is lost
Only the author can see

A personal experience
One that touched the soul
Shared with so many
Your words much like a whore

People judging your ink
Your thoughts bled from a pen
The true meaning of them all
Lost somewhere in your head

Improper format or rhyme
Others are quick to critisize
Jumbled words stuck in your head
So much effort to transfer to a pen

A personal thought
A feeling i've felt
A sight I've seen 
It's my poem
And it's poetry to me.  

Question #19:

I am very nervous, worried and confused, please help!?

I'm a 17 year old female from venezuela and a native spanish speaker I'm moving (with my family) to houston on january because of my dad's job. I graduated from high school on july, and if I was going to stay in venezuela my career would have started around february next year.

Now I'm struggling quite a lot with american college applications, and just the general progress. I've already narrowed the colleges I'm applying to the ones in houston (private: rice, st johns, houston baptist and houston university).

A bit about my academic record:
-3.67 gpa (18.34 out of 20 in venezuela's grading system)
-IB Diploma (most rigurous curse available at my school):Got it with a 30 but got an A on my extended essay wich was about comparing maduration rates of bovine oocytes that were from different bovine breeds
-In venezuela you do not choose the subjects you want to study each year, you have an assigned curriculum, but you usually had 9-12 subjects per grade, so I've got from Maths, Spanish&Literature, English (as a foreign language) (5 years each), Biology, Physics, Chemistry (organic and not organic), Geography, Economical Geography of Venezuela, World History, Venezuelan History, Computer Science, Music History and more...
Art was a big deal in my school, we had art classes at least twice a week for all of the highschool years.
-I ranked 6th in my class of 65.
-Have more than a 100 community service hours (80 are required by the school)
-Co-Founded the school's delegation for model of United Nations (MUN)
-Went to multiple MUN events and won a "outstanding delegate" award
-I was the academic director of the organizational committee in the first MUN even that was hosted in the school
-Participated in multiple theater plays, from comedic performance to dance.
-There is an event in my school which is called the "Scientific Congress" wich lasts about 2 weeks every year. I took part of the "journal committee" and became a senior editor.
-I also participated in the museum, an exhibition in wich we did murals and sculptures related to the scientific congress
-I participated every year since I was in 1st grade of elementary on Literature Contests, ranging from Book Symposiums, Poetry Recital, Oratory and Original Short Stories. Every year got an award or two and when I graduated I got the "Wings of Creativity" prize because of my participation over the years
-I also got on graduation a diploma of arts and design, I am a decent painter but I think I got it because my design was chosen for the graduating class t-shirts

I am really worried about the following things:
1.- I never participated on sports teams at my school, I was decent at soccer, volleyball and basket but I didn’t even try out for the teams because I wasn’t that good.
2.- SAT’s: Never heard of those until recently, I’m really worried because I took the practice test on college board and I got a 1640 (CR: 610 M: 540 and W:490). It was quite hard because English is not my mother tongue, and there were many words (especially in the writing section) which I didn’t know the meanings of. Also in math there were some terms wich I didn’t know the meanings in Spanish. Still, I am really worried, I had never taken an exam like that (except for IB, but IB math was REALLY different, it was focused on longer problems and structured solving rather than filling a single box). I am planning on studying really hard because I was considered a really good student and got into rigorous curses like IB and got my diploma.

My dream college would be rice but I am really disappointed of my sat results, I got the test in 3 weeks and I don’t know how much I can improve.

Do you think I might be able to get in those colleges (Rice specially)? Do you think I can improve my sat score 200 points at least? (I am really disciplined once I set up a goal). What else can I do to make some foreign Venezuelan girl application stand out?

Anykind of feedback will be much appreciated, I am really worried and confused about this whole new process that I'm getting into and my sat scores being to low to get into the colleges I want.

Question #20:

Worried about my sat scores!?

I'm a 17 year old female from venezuela and a native spanish speaker I'm moving (with my family) to houston on january because of my dad's job. I graduated from high school on july, and if I was going to stay in venezuela my career would have started around february next year.

Now I'm struggling quite a lot with american college applications, and just the general progress. I've already narrowed the colleges I'm applying to the ones in houston (private: rice, st johns, houston baptist and houston university).

A bit about my academic record:
-3.67 gpa (18.34 out of 20 in venezuela's grading system)
-IB Diploma (most rigurous curse available at my school):Got it with a 30 but got an A on my extended essay wich was about comparing maduration rates of bovine oocytes that were from different bovine breeds
-In venezuela you do not choose the subjects you want to study each year, you have an assigned curriculum, but you usually had 9-12 subjects per grade, so I've got from Maths, Spanish&Literature, English (as a foreign language) (5 years each), Biology, Physics, Chemistry (organic and not organic), Geography, Economical Geography of Venezuela, World History, Venezuelan History, Computer Science, Music History and more...
Art was a big deal in my school, we had art classes at least twice a week for all of the highschool years.
-I ranked 6th in my class of 65.
-Have more than a 100 community service hours (80 are required by the school)
-Co-Founded the school's delegation for model of United Nations (MUN)
-Went to multiple MUN events and won a "outstanding delegate" award
-I was the academic director of the organizational committee in the first MUN even that was hosted in the school
-Participated in multiple theater plays, from comedic performance to dance.
-There is an event in my school which is called the "Scientific Congress" wich lasts about 2 weeks every year. I took part of the "journal committee" and became a senior editor.
-I also participated in the museum, an exhibition in wich we did murals and sculptures related to the scientific congress
-I participated every year since I was in 1st grade of elementary on Literature Contests, ranging from Book Symposiums, Poetry Recital, Oratory and Original Short Stories. Every year got an award or two and when I graduated I got the "Wings of Creativity" prize because of my participation over the years
-I also got on graduation a diploma of arts and design, I am a decent painter but I think I got it because my design was chosen for the graduating class t-shirts

I am really worried about the following things:
1.- I never participated on sports teams at my school, I was decent at soccer, volleyball and basket but I didn’t even try out for the teams because I wasn’t that good.
2.- SAT’s: Never heard of those until recently, I’m really worried because I took the practice test on college board and I got a 1640 (CR: 610 M: 540 and W:490). It was quite hard because English is not my mother tongue, and there were many words (especially in the writing section) which I didn’t know the meanings of. Also in math there were some terms wich I didn’t know the meanings in Spanish. Still, I am really worried, I had never taken an exam like that (except for IB, but IB math was REALLY different, it was focused on longer problems and structured solving rather than filling a single box). I am planning on studying really hard because I was considered a really good student and got into rigorous curses like IB and got my diploma.

My dream college would be rice but I am really disappointed of my sat results, I got the test in 3 weeks and I don’t know how much I can improve.

Do you think I might be able to get in those colleges (Rice specially)? Do you think I can improve my sat score 200 points at least? (I am really disciplined once I set up a goal). What else can I do to make some foreign Venezuelan girl application stand out?

Anykind of feedback will be much appreciated, I am really worried and confused about this whole new process that I'm getting into and my sat scores being to low to get into the colleges I want.





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